alright, i like the general idea.
if ur gunna use some fruity loops pads.. disguise it by adding some varied pogo to the notes, or at least use some effects. you can never go wrong with effects.
learn the program a bit better, and ull get better at what u do. uk how to make drum lines and stuff tho. make sure u increase the velocity on those bass notes. the velocity might seem a little insignificant for now, but it makes a big difference in the long run.
and make sure u get multiple instrument tracks going.
u need some form of melody, pads are usually a basis for a melody to be layered on top of by some sort of saw, sine, or some kinda nice lead wave.
And DONT FORGET THE BASS!
but seriously man, mess around with the velocity with the drums, it give the piece a greater depth! what you have here is a pretty good skeleton for a track.
good luck for the future, and keep trekking.